** spoiler alert ** When I heard that Harry Potter and the Cursed Child was going to be in script form, I was thinking Shakespeare. I wasn’t expecting novel no-no’s in the stage direction like “There’s a lot of emotion here.” If there’s emotion, it should be obvious from the dialogue.
That said, I liked the storyline, and it was nice to feel like I was back at Hogwarts. I did think the tension between Harry and his son Albus was a bit inauthentic. Would Harry really tell his son “Sometimes I wish you weren’t my son?” I think Harry would have grown up a little more sensitive than that. And Ron was like a caricature of himself. I was also really hoping for a better closure to the story with Cedric’s dad. I’d have liked to see something good happen to him or at least some more meaningful dialogue. Maybe it will seem to have more depth on stage.
I gave the book 4 out of 5 stars, but here I am saying only negative things about it. That’s because the bar is set so high in Potter World, I guess. I loved being back at Hogwarts, I thought Hermione’s character was spot on, and I did feel the urgency of Albus and Scorpius’s adventure. I just missed Rowling’s writing and the usual Potter complexity.
“What a wimp!”
This is handwritten in the margin of the first and only draft of my first novella. My friend Jeff wrote it next to Cate and Micah’s first kiss. You see, I am a woman, and I thought that Micah’s hesitance was sweet and sensitive. If I had planned on marketing primarily to women, the scene might have sufficed, but if my own sweet and sensitive guy friend Jeff wasn’t going for it, I was in trouble.
On the other end of the spectrum, I’ve read novels written by men and thought, “THAT scene was supposed to be sexy?” Women who are unsure of themselves at work completely changing their personality on a first date, brazenly baring their breasts; women who aren’t gymnasts performing miraculous stunts; overly specific descriptions of sex with no dialogue or mentions of, I don’t know, thoughts or feelings…
MEN! ALWAYS HAVE A WOMAN CRITIQUE YOUR BOOK BEFORE YOU PUBLISH IT! It goes beyond love scenes. An otherwise great book can be derailed by a bad love scene, or worse, a woman written badly the whole way through a book. Ask a woman friend, “Have you ever known a woman who thought this way? Have you ever known a woman who acted like this?” You risk at least half your potential market if you don’t get it right, not to mention that you want to get it right for the sake of writing life like it really is. Don’t you?
Poor, wimpy Micah is only a pile of papers in my closet now, but if I ever go back to that novel I’ll have to do something about him. It might only be an added sentence or it might be a story-wide overhaul, but Micah is not a wimp, and I won’t have men readers thinking of him as such. It doesn’t do him justice.
Men, how do you see your woman character? Make sure women see her the same.